…Ellwyn Autumn – a sensible approach to senses for Authors…

…here’s a terrific piece from my friend, Authoress, Ellwn Autumn, on how we scribblers can ‘show, not tell‘, through awareness of our five senses… enjoy….
Story Starter: Use The Five Senses To Describe A Scene
   A great way to spice up a piece of writing is to use the five senses to set the scene. It immerses the reader in the story and as the title implies gives them a more sensory experience that is engaging and relatable.
   In the writing world, they constantly tell authors  to “show” not “tell”.  For example, if I were to “tell” about the photograph above I could say: It was a nice day at the park. My statement is accurate and to the point but where’s the panache? Did I engage the reader? Pull them in? Capture their imagination with my words? No, I didn’t.
   However, if I were to “show” the reader what I want them to experience, I could say:
   Soft sunlight lit up the treetops conceiving an emerald green canopy that dangled over the clear-cut walkway. Burnished tree trunks, offset by the light, covered the ground in alternating strips of shadow and light, a delicate pattern woven into the path I took.
   Perched on branches, birds sang out their morning salutations, while squirrels scampered about below as if caught up in a friendly game of tag. Freshly cut grass filled the air with its sweet scent. A light wind brushed my face as I breathed in the earthy smell and popped a piece of bubble gum in my mouth. The sweet taste flooding my tongue, I started my daily jog through the park.
   As you can see, I embellished a bit with the birds and the bubble gum, but that’s the beauty of writing. You can take whatever inspires you and create whatever you want from it. Using the photograph, my imagination, and some carefully chosen words I “showed” you a beautiful day at the park that is much more interesting than simply saying, “It was a nice day at the park.”
   Let’s double check to make sure I hit all five senses.
soft sunlight
emerald green canopy
strips of shadow
birds chirping
freshly cut grass
light wind brushed my face
sweet taste of bubble gum
   I touched on all five senses, some more than others, but that’s okay. Writing is a process. I can always go back and write another description for the photo or add to the one I’ve already started.
   Another way to describe the photo is to make a list of the senses and fill in what you actually see and what spurs your imagination.
brown tree trunks
green leaves
green grass
people talking
bike bell ringing
feet hitting the sidewalk
a lawn mower
bees or flies buzzing
wet soil
warm sunlight
wind blowing
cool air on your face
fresh water from a water bottle
trail mix
the smell of flowers was so thick I could almost taste them
Is there an ice-cream vendor nearby?
   Wow, isn’t it amazing the endless possibilities one photograph can inspire? Now it’s your turn. Use this picture or another one that strikes your fancy and jot down your possibilities. But, most importantly have FUN!!

Ellwyn Autumn is an American author and a certified teacher with a Master’s Degree in Education. She writes children’s picture books, middle-grade novels, and Young Adult fiction.

Ellwyn’s first self-published novel, Chris Kringle’s Cops The First Mission, was a Finalist in the 2016 Reader’s Favorite International Book Contest. Her Kamyla Chung picture book series addresses difficult issues facing young children and has won The Mom’s Choice Award Gold Seal.

Ellwyn discovered her passion for writing in second grade when she had to write a book report for school. She was so excited to write the report, until her mother told her that she had to write about someone else’s book and not her own story. Ellwyn became indignant and decided that once she finished the book report she would most certainly write her own original story. She has been writing ever since!

Ellwyn lives with her family in Pennsylvania. She loves all things magical, curling up with a good book, writing stories, and almost anything with chocolate in it.

She can be contacted thus :
…many thanks , Ellwyn for a great post… see yeez later… LUV YEEZ!


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11 responses to “…Ellwyn Autumn – a sensible approach to senses for Authors…

  1. A brilliant way of describing show don’t tell, Seumus…


  2. Reblogged this on Musings on Life & Experience and commented:
    On the use of the five senses by Seumas’ guest writer Ellwyn Autumn.


  3. Thanks, Seumas, I get awfy confused about “show not tell” and this post will help me a lot. xxx


  4. A helpful and clear piece. Thanks to you both.


  5. Reblogged this on Chris The Story Reading Ape's Blog and commented:
    Great tips from, Ellwyn, – on Seumas’ blog


  6. Nice post, my friend, with a timely reminder!


  7. This is a great guest post, Master Seumas. Very nicely done by Ellwyn (and I LOVE that name.)


  8. Pingback: My Guest Post On Seumas Gallacher's Blog | Ellwyn Autumn

  9. Reblogged this on Have We Had Help? and commented:
    More from unca Seumus


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